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Post by iluvjackson on Oct 14, 2005 18:01:07 GMT -5
Here is a poem I wrote. Sorry if it isn't very good. Please, tell me what you guys think. Cillian Murphy, he plays many a role. Once we saw him, Our hearts he stole. Jackson, Pig, or Jim, No matter what the role, We love them because they're him.
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Post by Kaylee on Oct 14, 2005 19:26:11 GMT -5
i love the lines, but the rhyming pattern seems a little off. like, it kinda goes
a b a b c a
do you know what i mean?
i like it tho. poems are always so cute!
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Post by iluvjackson on Oct 14, 2005 23:16:59 GMT -5
Thanks! ya i know what you mean. i couldn't think of something to put there to make it work, so that is what i got.
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Post by Only Gay In The Village on Oct 15, 2005 20:49:50 GMT -5
i though ti was lovely... better then what i could write
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Post by c.m.ismyxanatos on Oct 15, 2005 21:53:28 GMT -5
I love that you have expressed the thought for all of us! Bravo!
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Post by iluvjackson on Oct 15, 2005 23:15:35 GMT -5
Thanks guys! Feedback is greatly appreciated. Glad you liked it!
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Post by iluvjackson on Oct 16, 2005 18:51:35 GMT -5
hey, poeticliscense is the pattern ok now? :-)
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