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Post by Zombiekitten on Feb 13, 2012 14:12:16 GMT -5
Chapter 4 From now on it's getting erotic! ;D YAY !! That's why you have to either PM me for the link, or go to The Pub where I have posted the link to "Dextra" in the Naughty Fanfiction thread. I hope this chapter isn't somehow adsurd... LOL  (Well... I had fun writing it. *grin*) It's getting better, much better, I promise.  Mwahaha!
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Post by The Phantom Lady on Feb 15, 2012 11:54:57 GMT -5
Absurd? This is in no way absurd!
The only absurd about this is how well you write this; the descriptions of the grid, the riders... that poetic flow you have when you express the love scenes!
I enjoyed reading this, much beyond the sexual part of the love act, it was beautifully written and the words you used were so perfect!
Dextra is still making me nervous... and now he's seen the time, and sort of time he offers Judy... I have a real bad feeling about this!
I'm just so in awe!
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Post by Zombiekitten on Feb 15, 2012 16:41:59 GMT -5
Awwwwww.... Thank you so much Bloody Rose for these wonderful words...  The love scenes are really very important to me and I always try to write them as beautiful (but yet hot ) as possible. And it's such a joyful thing to hear that you as the reader feels this way about them.  There's more of that stuff to come ...hehe |
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Post by Zombiekitten on Mar 31, 2012 13:13:20 GMT -5
Chapter 5 !!!Ask me for the link via PM, or go to the Pub. ;D You'll find the link there in the "Cillian's naughty fanfiction" thread. Enjoooooy !!!
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Post by Pisces on Apr 1, 2012 13:24:09 GMT -5
WOOOHOOOO!!!! Always so happy to see you update!!! Apologies for not being able to review properly until now... but today is the day I treat myself to delving into both chapters 4 and 5! ;D I LOVE Judith's short interaction with Dextra, and her initial impression of her as well. She clearly notices that there is something lacking in Dextra, and it's unnerving to her. And Dextra's incessant search for answers to the riddle of the human condition are fascinating - her query "Why do you think you are not flawless?" underscores her fundamental lack of comprehension, being a flawless program herself. That's what I adore about your fics - you have the ability to fully get inside each character's perspective and see the world through their eyes, and that's the mark of great writing. EVERY character matters to you, not only your protagonist.  When Judith and Ed make love, it's so intensely sensual that I almost feel like a voyeur! Though there is an urgency and sensual need to their pairings, never do you lose sight of how much they mean to each other. True intimacy, in every sense of the word. They're imperfect people who are perfect together; it's a matured sort of love, which is very nice to read. I can't be specific without spoilers, but chapter 4 ends brilliantly! You're a master of cliffhangers. LOL - Ed's exploits in "taking Dextra for a walk" made me smile! He's an introvert who is being forced more and more into the outside world for the sake for the sake of broadening Dextra's horizons, and clearly is increasingly exhausted by her boundless curiosity. And of course, lacking human emotions herself, Dextra possesses no social skills whatsoever, so does not feel any sense of boundary-crossing in her constant requests. To her, there is no conflict, no inconvenience, for her existence is to gather information, and she is insatiable; I'm increasingly intrigued by her, and I can tell how much thought you have put into how everyone in the story relates to one another. SO well done!! LMAO at Ed trying to explain fashion to Dextra!  ;D So funny, that his dry, intellectual definition makes the very idea of fashion seem silly and extraneous (I'd really enjoy hanging out with him, btw ). "You look good enough in your circuitry suit. You don't need any clothes," Ed fobbed her off, evasively. Oh, he just wanted that particular errand OVER with, didn't he? LOL! I'm VERY curious about Emmanuelle. Just as Judith is. And I felt for her when she was wishing for words of love and devotion to him. ...a man with so much ice around the warm pulsing core of his heart. LOVE that description. It is difficult for Judith to satisfy herself with mere knowledge of being loved, yet she accepts it as part of the deal because she's aware of Ed's love for her in a million other small ways, and she's mature enough to not shatter the fairy tale by looking for problems where there are none. She's a cool customer. My favorite sentence in the fic so far: Ed could have looked at her forever. (SIGH... ) THAT'S a man in love to distraction. ;D It's evident how much thought and time you poured into this story, Zombie, and that's something I think any reader recognizes and appreciates. Honestly, your fic has it all - it's gorgeously realized in its own world, it's romantic, funny, breathtaking at times, intelligent, deep and wise. I've said it before but if Tron 3 comes out and Ed is in it as a larger character, it's YOUR Ed I will be watching. Thank you for writing this and sharing it with us!! Needless to say, you get a CB!!Keep those chapters coming!!! |
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Post by The Phantom Lady on Apr 2, 2012 8:31:38 GMT -5
I loved the new chapter, Zombie!
There is great humour in the way Ed and Dextra communicate, as much as she worries me she is a fantastic character, her need to know of 'the real world' is much like I suppose a human felt the first time in the Grid or any other alien world like that... but she is much like a child in her demands to Ed...
So whats the deal with Emmanuelle, I can't help having all these suspicions and ideas in my head as to who this person is, and what they are trying to do to Ed and Judith... but good thing Judith didn't take it like I'm sure it was intended!
I can't get enough of this, I NEVER can, please never make this end!
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Post by Zombiekitten on Apr 2, 2012 16:17:52 GMT -5
Thank you so much Pisces and Bloody Rose What would I do without you two ! I'm forever grateful to have you two as such insightful readers. Pisces, your review, once more, made my month ! LOL Reading your words always overwhelm me with joy. AND inspiration and creativity as well. I LOVE Judith's short interaction with Dextra, and her initial impression of her as well. This part, for expl, only exists because of YOU. Actually you inspired me to write Judith's encounter with Dextra, because you once said, if you was Judith you would be very curious about Dextra. Bloody Rose... SO glad you see the humor in Dextra's and Ed's communication. It was a fun part to write ;D I can't get enough of this, I NEVER can, please never make this end! It has to end, at some point... But more than 10 chapters until that! Emmanuelle... LOL Yeah... do your suspicions, ladies. |
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Post by Zombiekitten on Apr 15, 2012 14:18:38 GMT -5
Interlude
Dextra was watching. Always. Whatever happened at ENCOM, she saw it.
But instead of satisfying her, her hunger grew even stronger the more she saw, the more she witnessed. So many things she wanted. She felt that wanting like an emptiness within her. Like an empty memory cell, yet to be filled with data.
She was so hungry and so bored. So she tried out some things, experimented with some things. Played some games. She had games in the Grid to play. But they began to bore her too. Users were so much more interesting to play with, for Dextra could hardly guess their next step.
But with playing these games there also came the experience of losing. She never lost games, for she was the most efficient program in the Grid. That was a whole new experience for her and it raised something in her virtual self. Something she couldn’t name. But by comparing it with descriptions for feelings of Users she came across one word that was matching with what she felt: frustration
Actually, I'm not so sure about this. I really wanted to write it, but somehow it doesn't actually fit to the next chapter. But it fits somewhere between the last chapter and the next chapter... So I decided to make kind of a "extra mini chapter" / interlude out of this little insight into Dextra's mind. I hope it makes any sense for the reader. P.S. Chapter 6 VERY soon.
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Post by The Phantom Lady on Apr 15, 2012 14:28:49 GMT -5
That interlude did make sense, Dextra's boredom isn't a good sign, at all is it? *shiver*
I can not wait to read chapter 6!
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Post by Pisces on Apr 22, 2012 10:09:26 GMT -5
A teaser for Chapter 6!! ;D I can feel Dextra straining to burst out of the Grid...  I have the feeling she and her frustration won't long be contained! I love the way you always add more and more to the suspense of this fic - I'm hungrily awaiting more!!! Hope it's coming soon!! ;D |
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Post by Zombiekitten on Apr 27, 2012 13:23:09 GMT -5
Chapter 6 !!A quite long and eventful chapter. With a love scene slightly inspired by an erotic moment from one of Pisces fics. ;D And also inspired by a song. (Didn't we had that topic recently, Pisces ? LOL) Let's see if you can guess which song that is. It's not a modern one. More like an Oldie. And: Yes, I hate the word "nipples". Deal with it. LOL
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Post by Pisces on Apr 27, 2012 16:53:55 GMT -5
YAY!!!! I have read it, and will have a proper review sometime this weekend - I know which fic you were inspired by, Zombie... but I think you did this MUCH better than I! That was steamy!!! Will have to try and guess what song helped inspire this... an oldie, eh...? How old of an oldie..? |
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Post by Zombiekitten on Apr 27, 2012 21:22:37 GMT -5
Oh, no Pisces, that's too much of a compliment! *blushes* I'm literally BOWING before the way you write your sensual scenes !! You are such an inspiration to me. Ooops... I forgot to mention: Actually that certain song is French... Don't know if you know it at all. It's very popular in Europe because its lyrics were quite .... daring for that time (1969). LOL BUT ! I just found out that there is an English version existing, sung by Nick Cave (it's a duet) ! But I fear it's too hard to guess... |
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Post by bunnie24 on Apr 27, 2012 21:40:23 GMT -5
I just got around to reading all the chapters after chapter one..I love it!! and you must write more  |
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Post by Zombiekitten on Apr 29, 2012 7:50:38 GMT -5
Oh wow, Bunnie !! I wish I had your energy for reading. (I'm so lazy and slow with reading... ) Thank you so much ! |
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(Well... I had fun writing it. *grin*) It's getting better, much better, I promise. 
;D So funny, that his dry, intellectual definition makes the very idea of fashion seem silly and extraneous (I'd really enjoy hanging out with him, btw 
I have the feeling she and her frustration won't long be contained! I love the way you always add more and more to the suspense of this fic - I'm hungrily awaiting more!!! 