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Post by ikklehen on Sept 25, 2011 11:23:59 GMT -5
Ok girls I couldn't leave you without another chapter! I have written it purely because of the demand for one which is a lovely thing to oblige! Thank you for your kind reviews everyone! If you want to see what happens next just PM me as usual for the link!  Notice: This literature has a very explicit/adult theme. |
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Post by The Phantom Lady on Sept 25, 2011 12:05:24 GMT -5
Thank you so much for writing more of this!
This was so hot and sensual and I found myself feeling so incredibly jealous!
And then... OMG that was so intense and scary! *Shudders* you wrote that perfectly!
Now I really, really need to read more!
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Post by Pisces on Sept 25, 2011 16:11:03 GMT -5
SQUEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEE!!!!!!!! You made my weekend with this!!!!!!!!!!!!!   You are the MASTER at writing Jackson naughtiness!!!!!!! And HOLY CRAP, you're a metaphor goddess!!! I LOVE LOVE LOVE the stuff that flies off your keyboard and outta your brain. You make this seem so easy!! I have to quote something that just made me NUTS:
“Hard, dark shiny surfaces.” Jackson drawled, musing on his own home surroundings, “Leather.” The smell drove him wild secretly. Many a time had he finished a few female 'projects' in the aforementioned BMW. His prey leaving the scene smelling of the seats and his Chanel laced pheromones crushed into their skin and hair. Knowing they would want more.There are so many things I love about this little paragraph. I love the lazy way he's injected himself into the girls' conversation - he's on a nice, warm endorphin and whiskey high... and I can so clearly hear his husky voice saying this. But GOD, the way you describe the scent of his prey afterwards.... f*cking lyrical. WOW. RAW TALENT. And this: As his eyes lowered, his thick, silky eyelashes cast a boyish, almost bashful theme on his angelic visage. A smattering of baby freckles adorning his translucent skin. How can such a devil be a painted perfection of ethereal innocence? (SIGH...) Those amazing eyelashes of his, such a unique counterpoint to the nastiness and cruelty of his essence. I'm so glad you gave them a mention. Your gorgeous metaphors are almost too numerous to mention. But one I really liked as well was the one about May on the brass pole - you have such an incredible gift for making your reader envision something by describing something else - that's a talent all of its own and I admire it so. And the simple words you sprinkle through to describe Jackson - he prowls, growls and snarls his way through this club and it's a complete delight. You never lose sight of the EDGE that Jackson has - his mojo. And like the previous chapter, this one is freakin' HOT. It's got your unique stamp of poetic sensuality. And OMG... Jackson actually smiling as he teases Lara... GAHHHHHHHHHHHHHH..... he's a real piece of work!!! I also enjoyed the way Lara, intoxicated by his presence, feels stirrings of romantic longing for him. He's THAT easy to fall for. And I completely buy it. ;D Great finish as well - I certainly did NOT see that coming, just as he didn't! (Jackson's mumbled "Ow" made me laugh!) ABSOLUTELY OUTSTANDING!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! What a briliant escape and GORGEOUSLY written fic!!! You're immensely talented, my dear!!!! have a CB on me for the best Rippner fic I've read in years!!!!!!!!!! |
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Post by Zombiekitten on Sept 26, 2011 12:56:18 GMT -5
HOLY SHHHHHHHHHH I can't deal with so much hotness *falls dead* Like Victim of Love I feel so JEALOUS of these two "sirens" getting the whole Jackson treatment OMG ;D And they even get PAYED for this !! AWWWWWW... What you wrote about his LIPS and ...  .................  That made me sweat.... My favorite part is the one Pisces already quoted: What you wrote about his freckles and eyelashes and angelic look !!! That counterpoint is really fascinating and is one of the reasons he's so attractive and it makes his bad guy behavior even more intriguing. And it is SO well written, so poetic and yet sexy. You really have a huge talent in writing. You should write more !! You should publish !!! You should publish erotic storys!! Your exquisite and original writing would be something of quality and a counterdraft to these dull "The-half-naked-Highlander-holds-a-fainting-maiden-in-his-arms" erotic stories LOL But in general your writing is great! Not only the erotic parts. You have that talent to play with words so creatively ! I love that!!! And that ending !! WOWZAA !! I felt like in a Tarantino movie or something  Ohhh !! And I really enjoyed that part where Jackson joins his sirens at the pole. So erotic !!! That would make a great motive for an artwork !!! I feel inspired !!! CB !!! OF COURSE !! |
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Post by ikklehen on Sept 26, 2011 13:20:48 GMT -5
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Post by Pisces on Sept 26, 2011 15:43:00 GMT -5
Ohhh !! And I really enjoyed that part where Jackson joins his sirens at the pole. So erotic !!! That would make a great motive for an artwork !!! I feel inspired !!! I forgot to mention that part! I LOVED it!! It was unexpected and so bold of Jackson, and incredibly sexy. Zombie, if you draw that, I will worship the ground you walk on!! LOL!! ;D ;D ;D Pisces Your reviews are better than many a journalists! ;D You have a talent to write story as well as reviews, which in turn makes you not just a great moderator but also a very interesting one. I always anticipate your posts in here! And to be crowned with such lovely comments by the original CTL Author still bewilders me! MWWWAHH! Awwww... I just said what I was moved to say! LOL! I tried like hell not to gush, but I couldn't hold it back because this is a RIPPNER fic, and it's SO well done - I was genuinely that excited about your writing! Couldn't help myself! When I truly admire something artistic, I tend to get all enthusiastic. LMAO. Ask Zombie!! ;D ;D You truly deserve every iota of praise for this fic. It's a gem among Rippner fics. |
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Post by Zombiekitten on Sept 26, 2011 16:25:49 GMT -5
When I truly admire something artistic, I tend to get all enthusiastic. LMAO. Ask Zombie!! ;D Oh yeah that's true !! Pisces' comments and praises are always HONEY for me!! And they have the magic to encourage and inspire me even more! Btw: I'm really considering that Jackson-and-his-sirens-pole-dancing fanart LOL Although I can't really draw women...  |
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Post by Pisces on Sept 26, 2011 16:34:08 GMT -5
I'm really considering that Jackson-and-his-sirens-pole-dancing fanart LOL Although I can't really draw women... OMG if you are even THINKING of drawing that scene, I'm gonna die!!! LOL!! I have every confidence in you to be able to draw ANYTHING. No pressure, though!!! Seriously!!! I just love the way one artist inspires another on this forum. Ikklehen got the idea for this fic from a fan art of mine, and now Zombie is getting an idea from this fic... such a cool chain of creativity!! Creative symbiosis!!  |
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Post by bluestar on Sept 27, 2011 4:39:59 GMT -5
WOW !!!, this was described so well, Pisces has already mentioned this,but it really was my favourite bit : “Leather.” The smell drove him wild secretly. Many a time had he finished a few female 'projects' in the aforementioned BMW. His prey leaving the scene smelling of the seats and his Chanel laced pheromones crushed into their skin and hair. Knowing they would want more. It sounds soo intense and sensual,really well written Ikklehen  Oh and I agree Pisces- I really do love the way you write your reviews,so detailed and eloquent,and you often write what I'm thinking but in a much better and wonderful way. |
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Post by disarm79 on Sept 27, 2011 12:41:14 GMT -5
Pisces always comes up with the right things to say, and she's right you are a metaphor goddess!!!
It's freezing, but I don't feel like turning on the furnace just yet. I've been bundled up in blankets all morning, but somehow they have all fallen off after reading your story Ikklehen-that's how hot it is. CB for you, and please don't ever stop writing.
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Post by Pisces on Sept 27, 2011 15:21:40 GMT -5
Thanks, bluestar and disarm! I always think of myself as a Master of the Obvious, but you guys have put it so much more nicely! I did have a very short stint as a movie reviewer in my local newspaper about ten years ago ( From My Seat), and enjoyed the heck out of it. Would have done it for free... Oh wait... I did! One more thing I HAVE to compliment about this chapter. Two words:
... breeding quarters.YUM. |
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Post by ikklehen on Sept 27, 2011 15:56:40 GMT -5
Awwww Thank you Bluestar and Disarm LMAO at the blanket thing Disarm! ;D I'm glad you enjoyed the writing! I will knock out some more metaphors soon then... and YES! Pisces indeed it is a chain of creativity! And wow! That's awesome you did the movie review thing! You should do it pro... get into it hunny! Zombz I'm sure you can draw ANYTHING! How we would love to see a Nawty Rippner rammed between two hot ladies of the night! Plenty of wording in the story to guide the description! Anything you do will send us crazy! |
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Post by Zombiekitten on Sept 27, 2011 16:07:39 GMT -5
Plenty of wording in the story to guide the description! Oh yeah, that's true ! ;D I think I have to re-read some parts to get all the details right. Not that I would complain... LOL But I fear my hands will be too sweaty to draw hahaha. |
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Post by ikklehen on Oct 2, 2011 15:10:33 GMT -5
Zombz! Just have a box of tissues at the side! A big thanks to Pisces for posting this fic on the www.jacksonrippner.net site! That is really sweet! CB for you hun! <3 <3 <3
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Post by impeachy on Oct 27, 2011 14:34:01 GMT -5
Before writing down my thoughts on your fic, Ikklehen, I had to give you a CB for being so awesome! ;D Thank you so much for sharing the fic with us. Honestly, the first time I read it, I couldn't finish it because I'm such a big JacksonxLisa shipper. I still am. To say that I'm immersed in JxL fics would be an understatement, because I read them a LOT. That's why I felt like I couldn't stand the thought of Jackson touching a woman other than Lisa. I think it was Pisces who said that you write Jackson very much in character, and I agree with that. I can definitely imagine this is how he would be like minus Lisa in the picture. I got over my apprehensions, though, and decided to just suck it up and read the fic again, and made sure to finish it. I'm SO glad I did, because your fic was such a fantastic read! I love the end of chapter two so much, because empowered females like Lara absolutely rock -- it would be great if you could continue where that chapter left off. I love how the fic turned out...and that coming from a self-confessed JxL shipper should be an accomplishment for you, because you've opened my eyes to the fact that Lisa's presence isn't a requirement for a "Red Eye" fic to be outstanding. (Oh, my poor heart!) The title "metaphor goddess" definitely suits you, and I agree with the other ladies in here that your fic is poetic. It's like reading poetry in prose, which is a writing style that I love. Not only that, your fic is permeated with an air of sensuality from beginning to end, even in the way you describe the surroundings and the character's actions. The snippets of humor spread throughout the fic are really refreshing, and I couldn't help laughing out loud at some instances. Gotta love the "Rippner stamp of service." I noticed you used the word "peachy" a couple of times. LOL. Not that it matters... ;D I like your depiction of Jackson using "brash and cheesy" lines when talking to women. That's hilarious, considering how he's often pictured to be a smooth-talking, suave assassin. ;D Good job, Ikklehen! ;D Keep on writing. I was wondering if you would do a Capa fan fic? If memory serves me right, I think he's your favorite character...and he seems awfully lonely. LOL! ;D |
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