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Post by beyond_beautiful on Oct 28, 2005 15:09:26 GMT -5
It's been read 16 times but no replies?  Is it really that bad?  |
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Post by fosforito on Oct 28, 2005 15:29:57 GMT -5
okay, then I´ll be the first on to reply  interesting beginning. So it´s already clear that Crane knows Selena from before and I´m now wondering what kind of relationship they had before. It must have been sth. more than just being pals, right? ;-) (...He remembered how he used to love running his fingers through it..) I´m curious to see how it´ll go on.. And concerning replies: don´t worry, this also happens to me with my stories, too :-) I think there are many silent readers out there.. |
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Post by fosforito on Oct 28, 2005 16:13:38 GMT -5
okay, you gave the answer to my question about their relationship now it´s interesting to get to know hat happened between Jon and Selena... |
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Post by fosforito on Oct 28, 2005 16:35:47 GMT -5
ohh.. Scarecrow´s bride then!!  Well, I was surprised. first because of the story´s length (but the reason for that can be that my stories are so long...don´t know if you have read them...they´re REALLY long, haha) and second because of the eending b/c honestly I was expecting sth. else. But good work though!  |
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Post by beyond_beautiful on Oct 28, 2005 16:50:19 GMT -5
Thanks ... *ahem* I put two things in this story that were from 2 of Cillians other movies ... can you figure them out? and what kind of ending were you expectig?  |
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Post by fosforito on Oct 28, 2005 17:09:39 GMT -5
Hey, well.. Selena was the girl from 28 dl, right? The other thing... hmmm... I don´t know... *guessing*: Intermisson? No I don´t have any idea. The ending...err.. I think I was more surprised about the story´s length and there I´m definetly influenced by my stories now (I´m currently writing chh. 13 of my sequel now and this story is not even on its way to send, so... ..) Thanks ... *ahem* I put two things in this story that were from 2 of Cillians other movies ... can you figure them out? and what kind of ending were you expectig? |
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Post by beyond_beautiful on Oct 28, 2005 17:37:44 GMT -5
hehee Yes the Selena/28 dl!!! and the other is her slit wrists ... OTE!!!! generally my stories are much longer!! im writing a fic thats already at chapter 22 and im not near finshed with it yet |
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Post by fosforito on Oct 28, 2005 17:44:58 GMT -5
28 dl? *making a fist* .. yesss... OTE? *slapping herself* ..sh*te... hahaha ;D so then you know what I´m talking about writing a "saga" hehee Yes the Selena/28 dl!!! and the other is her slit wrists ... OTE!!!! generally my stories are much longer!! im writing a fic thats already at chapter 22 and im not near finshed with it yet |
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Post by beyond_beautiful on Oct 28, 2005 17:46:16 GMT -5
oh yes ... I know |
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Post by beyond_beautiful on Oct 28, 2005 17:46:39 GMT -5
and the fact is actually, what I'm writing is a sequel to a fic that was only 18 chapters!!! hmmm ...
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Post by fosforito on Oct 28, 2005 17:48:25 GMT -5
hahaha, weelll.. my first fic (Twisted tale from a broken heart) has 37 chapters the second one I´m currently writing (In statu nascendi) has 12 ch. so far and ch.13 will be ready soon.. so.. I don´t have any iadeas how many chapters are still to come... but it´ll be lots of I think... and the fact is actually, what I'm writing is a sequel to a fic that was only 18 chapters!!! hmmm ... |
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Post by scotsrockgod on Oct 30, 2005 22:00:51 GMT -5
Ch. 1 ... to which I say, I like the aura of mystery. I loved the last sentence. Very evocative. And now, Ch. 2: I like the exchange about intent to kill vs. cry for help. Ch. 3: And, wow, now for something completely different. I like the idea of Crane having a bedroom at Arkham! Just one tip, though -- generally, when characters start a new line of dialogue, you start a new paragraph. It's a bit easier to understand. |
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Post by beyond_beautiful on Nov 1, 2005 15:50:43 GMT -5
"Just one tip, though -- generally, when characters start a new line of dialogue, you start a new paragraph. It's a bit easier to understand." I appreciate that tip... it's something I've only just learned recently, and I'm kind of having diffiuclty adapting to it ... but Im sure ill get used to it eventually, LOL! I'm glad you enjoyed it |
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Post by scotsrockgod on Nov 5, 2005 18:34:09 GMT -5
I'm glad you enjoyed it Are you going to write more? Not necessarily of this, but ... |
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Post by beyond_beautiful on Nov 5, 2005 18:35:24 GMT -5
well ... at the moment i am swamped with homework .... i might eventually ... but im not really sure
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