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Post by The Phantom Lady on Sept 30, 2011 17:54:37 GMT -5
Firstly I must warn you; This comes from a very dark place and will involve violence and abuse...
A Little teaser:
When Angelica had first opened her eyes to see the darkness surrounding her she was sure she had made it home safely and had gone to sleep in her own bed but it didn’t take long for her to feel the unfamiliar sheets against her naked body. This wasn’t her bed and she sat up instantly hugging her body to hide herself; wondering if any prying eyes were hiding in the complete darkness. Her ears compensated for the lack of sight and despite being nearly deaf on her left ear under normal circumstances she could hear anything; anything meaning the only sound which was her body moving and her own erratic breathing.
If you want to read more; please comment here or PM me; I will not PM anyone back who are under the age of 18.
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Post by bluestar on Oct 4, 2011 8:58:04 GMT -5
What a very naughty Crane! That was very intense and scary-the part at the end when she remembered her mother's words made me think it happened to her,thank god it didn't. It was very well written espescially how Crane doesn't seem to realise what he's doing  |
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Post by kimmiethemime on Oct 4, 2011 11:49:41 GMT -5
Please |
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Post by bunnie24 on Oct 4, 2011 12:45:24 GMT -5
...do I have to spell it out? ME ME...send it to me! |
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Post by Zombiekitten on Oct 4, 2011 13:11:25 GMT -5
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Post by The Phantom Lady on Oct 4, 2011 13:44:53 GMT -5
What a very naughty Crane! That was very intense and scary-the part at the end when she remembered her mother's words made me think it happened to her,thank god it didn't. It was very well written espescially how Crane doesn't seem to realise what he's doing I am glad it worked the way it should, especially the flash back! Btw I realized we have the same birthday! ;D |
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Post by bluestar on Oct 5, 2011 16:54:56 GMT -5
Btw I realized we have the same birthday! ;D Omg you're right, we do,that is cool birthday twin! ;D |
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Post by Zombiekitten on Oct 7, 2011 19:13:21 GMT -5
This was really DARK OMG... And I am someone who's afraid of darkness!  If I was her I probably had gone crazy in that darkness. *shudder* Crane and his experiments...  He's really got some social disfunctions and illnesses. He doesn't even know what cruel thing he's doing!! What an intense and scary read ... I must say I really like the idea of letting this happen in the darkness. That gives the things that are happening even more scaryness and discomfort. |
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Post by The Phantom Lady on Oct 11, 2011 15:50:34 GMT -5
I am very afraid of the dark too; I always feel like it's strangling me...
I don't know if it shines through too well but I kinda wanted this Dr. Crane to have 2 personalties. he is one way when he conducts his experiments and once he is through he's someone different...
Anyways...
I know this stopped sort of abruptly and there is a reason for that, it was a lot longer but 'The morning after' just hit a little too close to home and after writing it I just deleted it... But the ending has bothered me so I've re-written it and made a whole other chapter.
I am still editing, but if you are interested you know the drill...
Part 2 'Afraid of the Dark'
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Post by Zombiekitten on Oct 16, 2011 17:23:40 GMT -5
That's an interesting aspect with those two personalities! Link me the second part too. I 'd really like to know what happens!  |
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Post by mozartiswatching on Oct 22, 2011 19:48:09 GMT -5
sounds interesting... me as well please  |
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Post by The Phantom Lady on Oct 23, 2011 3:40:01 GMT -5
I've send it off to both of you |
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Post by slashissexc on Dec 15, 2011 8:39:37 GMT -5
Could i please read it I think its interesting what you have already written! |
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Post by bluestar on Dec 24, 2011 6:48:16 GMT -5
Read part 2 - gosh that was very dark and well written !
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Post by drsteinmadness1 on Sept 14, 2015 19:11:13 GMT -5
Can i please have the link
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If I was her I probably had gone crazy in that darkness. *shudder*
He's really got some social disfunctions and illnesses. He doesn't even know what cruel thing he's doing!!
