In statu nascendi (ch.39 up) - sequel to ATTFABH

[fosforito]

Well, I was thinking of it but on the other hand I fear the stories would be "incomplete" then.

As we talked about this on AIM those "special scenes" in the stories are important ones, also to really express the deep relationship between Alex and Jonathan and the leading motive esp. in my first story is the love between them.

So...I don´t know..hmm...maybe...I´ll see...

azina said:

You know you might want to post maybe a PG-13 version of your story on fanfiction.net. You'd have a larger audience and some of them enjoy the intellectual/psychological stories.

[fosforito]

What do you mean with "cooler"?

Now I´m curious - explain! ;D

blue said:

Yes ma'am i did ;D And alexandra has definitely gotten cooler since then

[blue]

Well she's got that awesome fake name now, and she's a mysterious assassin (I'm assuming). She's so devilishly evil... It's cool. lol. Now instead of being alexandra the normal girl that had jonathan in love with me (Not that that's a BAD thing...), I'm alexandra dev...whatever. Ehh, you get the idea

Alexandras will rule the world.

[fosforito]

hehe... ;D

well, I think you missed sth.

Her name is JANE Deveraux now and yes, you´re right, her name change has to do sth. with her profession..

... but I think you will be surprised about what will happen ;-)

blue said:

Well she's got that awesome fake name now, and she's a mysterious assassin (I'm assuming). She's so devilishly evil... It's cool. lol. Now instead of being alexandra the normal girl that had jonathan in love with me (Not that that's a BAD thing...), I'm alexandra dev...whatever. Ehh, you get the idea

Alexandras will rule the world.

[blue]

alllright. bring on the next chapter! lol

[azina]

fosforito said:

Well, I was thinking of it but on the other hand I fear the stories would be "incomplete" then.

As we talked about this on AIM those "special scenes" in the stories are important ones, also to really express the deep relationship between Alex and Jonathan and the leading motive esp. in my first story is the love between them.

So...I don´t know..hmm...maybe...I´ll see...

azina said:

You know you might want to post maybe a PG-13 version of your story on fanfiction.net. You'd have a larger audience and some of them enjoy the intellectual/psychological stories.

Mmmm, I love those scenes.

[azina]

blue said:

Well she's got that awesome fake name now, and she's a mysterious assassin (I'm assuming). She's so devilishly evil... It's cool. lol. Now instead of being alexandra the normal girl that had jonathan in love with me (Not that that's a BAD thing...), I'm alexandra dev...whatever. Ehh, you get the idea

Alexandras will rule the world.

I can't see her as being evil, but she's fallen, like Jonathan you might say, no longer innocent with blood on her hands like he has. No, I don't see her playing the victim, she is the predator, but I think something is waiting for us we aren't aware of.

[blue]

She's got a few tricks up her sleeve, surely...

[blue-eyed struck]

Stop teasing Alex! When are you posting the next chapter!?

[fosforito]

soon...promised

flygirl00 said:

Stop teasing Alex! When are you posting the next chapter!?

[this bike is a]

im gonna wait til you finish, to read the this story cos the cliffhangers kill me.

[fosforito]

nooo... cmon....

you also gotta tell me what you think of the story so far...

I love to discuss it with you guys...

orangekoolaid said:

im gonna wait til you finish, to read the this story cos the cliffhangers kill me.

[fosforito]

Hi to all.

Here´s chapter 6, a short but effective one I think.

Enjoy

Chapter 6 (Breakdown)

Jonathan was driving to his apartment as fast as he could. He drove into the building´s garage with squealing wheels, without breaking in time. His Jaguar hit the side-wall and the outside mirror and the car´s fender got damaged.

Jonathan got out of his car and ran over to the elevator, without taking his briefcase with him nor locking up his car. This time, he didn´t used the elevator as he usually did, instead of this he ran upstairs into the 10th floor of the building, up to the penthouse, his apartment.

He was now standing in front of the main door of his apartment, out of breath, pulling the keys out of his pocket. With shaking hands Jonathan opened the door of his apartment, jumped in and slammed the door behind him.

It was early afternoon already and the sun was shining bright through the big windows into the living room. She sunlight flooded the room, but Jonathan didn´t want to see it. He pressed himself with his back against the apartment´s door, his eyes closed. His lungs were burning, he was sweating and his whole body was trembling. He could feel his eyes filling up with tears. Jonathan leaned at the door for a few seconds, then he ran over into the bedroom. On his way he took off his suit jacket, his tie and his sweater and let them fall on the floor without paying attention to them anymore.

* „Jonathan“ *

Jonathan ripped his t-shirt off his body then he took off his shoes in a hurry.

* „Jonathan“ *

Jonathan unbuckled the belt of his pants, taking them off.

„What have you done, Scarecrow?!!“, he shouted when he started to open the drawers of the big bureau, rummaging through them. „What have you done to me?!“

And he could hear Scarecrow saying * „Jonathan, Jonathan“ * over and over again, when his hands were harshly rummaging through the drawers, tearing them out of their anchoring and letting them fall on the floor after still not having found what Jonathan was looking for.

Jonathan opened one more drawer of his bureau – and then he found it!! It was the necklace!! It was Alexandra´s necklace!! Jonathan gripped it with shaking hands, holding it so firmly that his knuckles colored white.

He was still trembling when he ran over into the bathroom. He flipped the light on and turned on the water of the shower. Tears were running down Jonathan´s face and he wasn´t able to calm down.

* „Jonathan“ *

Jonathan teared up the faucet of his wash basin, placed the necklace aside and splashed his face with water. He could feel the ice cold water on his hot skin and a shiver ran down his back. Because of the hot water coming out of the shower the bathroom fogged and it was warm inside the room but Jonathan, standing in front of the wash basin only in his shorts, was shaking of cold.

He gazed into the mirror, his tears still running down his face.

„What have you done, Scarecrow?? What have you done?!“, Jonathan shouted, almost yelling now.

* „Jonathan“ *, he could say Scarecrow over and over again.

„Why did you tell me that she´s dead?!! Why have you done this?!“, Jonathan yelled and gripped the necklace, again so firmly that it hurt him.

The water in the wash basin and in the shower kept on running, when Jonathan pressed himself with his back against the cold, tiled wall of the bathroom, still trembling, crying bitterly.

And he could hear Scarecrow saying *“Jonathan“* *“Jonathan“* over and over again when his knees gave way and he slided down to the floor along the wall. He drew up his legs close to his body, his arms clasping round his legs, the necklace still in his hand, still holding it so firmly that blood now started to run out of his fist.

Jonathan could hear the monotonous rushing and splashing noise of the water in the background, when he was rocking back and forth in fast movements, his head hitting the wall over and over again, still crying, his gaze fixed and cold.

[azina]

Awww, Jonathan. Poor, poor Jonathan! I feel so sorry for him!

Wow, Alex, some really powerful writing in this. It tears my heart out that Scarecrow took advantage of Jonathan when he was the most vulnerable and now he's paying the price. The grief is so raw and real in this chapter. Oh, our poor Jon!

[fosforito]

thank you thank you Azina

well, besides of the fact that Jonathan is suffering a nervous breakdown in a way, Scarecrow is kinda "trapped" in this situation because he lied to Jonathan all the time and Jonathan now realized that he was betrayed. And Scarecrow can´t say anything but Jon´s name all the time.

As you said: he´s now paying the price for it - at least at this moment.

I think I´ll have the next chapter up tonight.

azina said:

Awww, Jonathan. Poor, poor Jonathan! I feel so sorry for him!

Wow, Alex, some really powerful writing in this. It tears my heart out that Scarecrow took advantage of Jonathan when he was the most vulnerable and now he's paying the price. The grief is so raw and real in this chapter. Oh, our poor Jon!