A twisted tale from a broken heart (COMPLETED)

[dior4ever]

Lovley!!!

[fosforito]

Hi to all!

Just wanted to inform you that I´ve added the missing chapters (ch. 17-22) on the website.

Thanx again to Dr. J Crane for proof-reading them!

So: the story is COMPLETE now

As I´ve received several PMs with so different reactions on the story´s ending I´d really love to discuss it with you guys here on the board.

"What do you think Jonathan did at the end?", "Why did this and this happen?" and so on.

I was very surprised about the different reactions, so..

I already started to write the sequel but due stressy days at work I´m not really sure yet when I´ll start to post the chapters. But I´ll keep you informed!

Bye for now!
Alexandra

[natashazierhofer]

Oh I would love to read that story!!

[ontheedge]

You should, they are very good.

[fosforito]

Here´s the link to the story again so you don´t have to look over the whole thread for it:

www.alexggarcia.com/crane/index.html

Have fun and please: feedback, feedback, feedback ;D

Alexandra

[this bike is a]

if there hadnt been a sequel, i would be super sad.

[fosforito]

hey!


yeah, it would be..

but on the other hand you would get an explanation for Jonathan Crane becoming that evil that he is...

orangekoolaid said:

if there hadnt been a sequel, i would be super sad.

[fosforito]

Hi to all!

As I received several PM´s over the last days, asking for sending my first story I decided to repost it here in the same way as I´m doing this with the story´s sequel: "In statu nascendi".

So here comes my first story: "A twisted tale from a broken heart".

Of course you can still read the story on the website.

Here´s the link:
www.alexggarcia.com/crane/index.html

There will be also some R-rated parts in the story and the posting system look like this:

ALL chapters will be posted here on the board and at the same time on the website

When an R-part comes up it will be marked and you´ll get the website like to finish reading the chapter there.

I hope, this posting system will make it more comfortable for you to read the story.

So again:

This fan fiction will have R rated parts and will also contain language, strong sexual contents and violence.
Please have in mind, that I can´t take any responsibility for possible damage, the story might have on you, k?

I hope you new readers will like the story and the sequel and please - feedback, feedback, feedback!!!!

[fosforito]

Okay, here is the first chapter!

Enjoy!! ;D

Chapter 1 (The Rain)

They managed to reach the roofed bench right on time, just as the rain started coming down. They hurried up the hill near the small lake, where they had spent the whole afternoon and had just reached the bench when it started to rain. But it didn’t help at all - Jonathan and Alexandra were now soaked to the skin and the water kept running down at their necks and through their hair. Even the books in their hands were wet. 

“damn it!”, Alexandra cursed, after she noticed that her ink-written notes for her upcoming physics-exam had gotten wet and the ink had smeared all over the paper. 

She started to shake out her notepad, trying to stop it from getting worse. Jonathan just watched.

“Hold on, this doesn’t make any sense, what you’re doing”, he finally said. “Let’s put the stuff on the bench.”

He put his books on the bench and without saying anything, took Alexandra’s stuff out of her hands to place it beside his own. Because of the rain and the sudden change in the temperature, Jonathan’s glasses had gotten wet and were now fogging up. Alexandra looked at Jonathan putting down the books and the notepads on the bench and started to laugh.  Jonathan was irritated.

“What is it?”, he asked harshly and looked up at Alexandra.

He hadn’t even noticed that his glasses were foggy. Jonathan was angry about the fact that he tried to save their notes and that Alexandra hadn’t anything better to do than to laugh at him.

“I don’t find this funny!”, Jonathan hissed. “I’m trying to keep our stuff safe and dry and you’re making your fun of me!” 

His bright blue eyes blazed with anger – even through his now-foggy glasses. Alexandra bit on her lower lip to suppress her laughter. Jonathan had completely misunderstood her.

“Jonathan!”, she said, trying to suppress the laughter welling up inside, “Your glasses are completely steamed up! I really appreciate you making such a valiant effort for our books – but you possibly can’t see anything anymore!”

Jonathan paused for a moment.

“Oh!”, he said finally and a smile whisked over his lips. 

Both looked at each other – at least Jonathan pretended to do so, but he really couldn’t see anything – and burst out laughing.

“I’m so sorry...”, Alexandra said, roaring with laughter as Jonathan took off his glasses to clean them with his shirt, “but that looked so funny: the blind saviour of the books!”

“Hahah!”,  Jonathan answered with a huge grin on his face and his eyes started sparkling again – only this time, not because of anger. 

He checked his glasses with a glance and started to put them on again. Alexandra touched his arm.

“No, don’t!”, Jonathan looked at her. “Your shirt is wet and your glasses aren’t properly dry anyway.. and... you look so nice without them..”

“Thank you..”, Jonathan said in a low voice as he glanced at Alexandra, folded up his glasses and put them away into the pocket of his wet shirt. 

“And.. you have such a beautiful smile, do you know that, Jonathan Crane?“, Alexandra added. 

He gazed into her eyes. 

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[blue-eyed struck]

^ wait! Is that how it started!? Why am I thinking it all began in the hallway of their school!?

Either way....the memories of their love! awww...

[fosforito]

yeah it started there, Jon was having a "flashback" in the 2nd chapter..

flygirl00 said:

^ wait! Is that how it started!? Why am I thinking it all began in the hallway of their school!?

Either way....the memories of their love! awww...

[blue-eyed struck]

^ ah yes! I remember now! I thought it was out of order for a min there!

[fosforito]

haha, no no, don´t worry :-)

BTW: 2nd chapter now:

flygirl00 said:

^ ah yes! I remember now! I thought it was out of order for a min there!

[fosforito]

Okay, here is the second chapter!

Enjoy!! ;D

Chapter 2 (Rememberance Pt. I)

Both had known each other for 4 years now, since Alexandra had first become Jonathan’s new classmate. He could still remember very well when and how they first met.

Jonathan was in the hallway at school, opening his locker to get out his books for the next class when suddenly, a hand grabbed the collar of his shirt and pushed him against the locker next to his own.

“Now look who’s here!!” Jonathan heard the dark, strong voice of a boy. 

It was the voice of Gary Merrill, a tall, good-looking guy, quarterback on the Gotham High School Football Team, class swaggerer – and somebody who enjoyed waylaying Jonathan to beat him up frequently. It seemed that today would be one of those days again. 

Gary didn’t care about being seen in the school’s hallway, as no one of the passing students would dare interrupt him. Jonathan tried to break away, but Gary kept his hold on him and pushed him back so hard, Jonathan hit the locker’s door with a crash. Gary grabbed Jonathan’s throat and pushed his head against the locker door.  Jonathan gasped for breath. Gary’s pal Matt, who was standing next to them the whole time, grinned maliciously. He was on the lookout in the hallway, to warn Gary if one of the teachers should come up.

“You little rat, you freak!”, Gary hissed and pushed Jonathan harder against the locker. “I’m sick of seeing your mug and have been, for a long time now.”

“Gary, I.. can’t breathe....!”, gasped Jonathan and tried to break away from Gary’s death-grip. 

But the more he struggled, the tighter Gary’s hold on Jonathan’s throat became. Gary grabbed Jonathan’s glasses with the other hand, grabbed them off his face and let them fall down on the floor. Jonathan heard the cracking of his glasses under Gary’s foot.

“You should take damn good care of yourself, otherwise it won’t be only your glasses next time!”, Matt bawled and laughed.

“Yeah, exactly!”, Gary added and both friends laughed maliciously, as Jonathan’s eyes filled up with tears. His face blushed and he gasped for breath.  

“Hey! You there! Let the boy go!”, a clear voice suddenly yelled behind them. Gary and Matt turned around. 

At the entrance, there stood a young girl, looking at them. They had never seen her before.

“Hey, what do you want?!”, Gary hissed, obviously angry at the fact that someone dared interrupt him, “Mind your own business, you silly girl!!”

“I said, let the boy go!”, the girl repeated in a firm voice. 

Gary loosened his grip around Jonathan’s throat, but didn’t completely release him. Jonathan gasped for breath and began to cough. The malicious grin had vanished off of Matt and Gary’s faces. Matt planted himself squarely before the girl as Gary’s eyes blazed with anger.

“I’m sorry, the little chick didn’t understand.”, Matt said with a glance at Gary. “Maybe we should explain how thing’s happen around here.” 

Both started to grin again and Matt was about to step forward, towards the girl when he saw her putting her hand on the fire-alarm knob  right next to her.

“Well – give it a try then!”, the girl said again in a firm voice, still looking at Gary and Matt. 

Matt stopped. For a few seconds they looked at each other. Finally Matt said, “You know what, Gary? I think we’ve had enough fun for today!”

Gary looked first at the girl, then at Matt and finally at Jonathan. He knew that if she were to release the alarm, all the doors of the classrooms would fly open immediately and the hallways would be filled up with students and teachers within seconds. Even if he wanted to, he wouldn’t have the chance to “clear up” matters, neither with Jonathan nor with the girl.

Gary nodded, then pulled around Jonathan so hard that he stumbled over Gary’s legs and fell on the ground.

“That was a close shave, Scarecrow!”, Gary hissed, disgruntled, turning around to the girl. “And you too should take good care of yourself!” he yelled at her. 

The girl didn’t respond – simply scowled. Her eyes blazed with anger.

The girl still had her hand on the alarm knob as Gary and Matt started to move to leave the hallway. They started laughing maliciously again and kicked at Jonathan’s books, which had fallen on the floor, when he was attacked. Jonathan was still lying on the floor, panting. 

When Gary and Matt were out-of-sight, the girl walked over to Jonathan and knelt down next to him. She put her books on the floor and helped Jonathan get up on his knees. Some of the students passing by were watching them, but no one said anything or even tried to help. Jonathan leaned against the locker door, trying to stand up, rubbing his hurting throat. It burned like hell and Jonathan started to cough again.

“Calm down...”, the girl whispered and touched Jonathan’s shoulder softly. 

Then she began to pick up his books, scattered all over in the hallway. Jonathan paused for a moment and then started to help her. 

“Thanks, but I can handle it.” It was embarrassing, just sitting here and watching the girl pick up his stuff.

“No problem.”, answered the girl, without looking up. 

As Jonathan reached out to pick up a book lying next to him, the girl picked up his glasses. Thanks to Gary’s kick, a small piece had broken off and one of the glasses was cracked. The girl held Jonathan’s glasses in her hands like a precious treasure and put them carefully into Jonathan’s hands.  Their hands touched lightly for a moment and the girl gazed into Jonathan’s eyes.

“Thank you..” Jonathan whispered in a light trembling voice. 

He didn’t know why, but the girl’s gaze made him a bit nervous.

“Who were those idiots, the guys bothering you?”, the girl asked and helped Jonathan get up on his feet.

“Our class swaggerer and his best pal.”, Jonathan answered. 

He glanced shortly at the broken glasses in his hands. Meanwhile the girl had picked up all books from the floor.

“I have to thank you..”, started Jonathan. “I think you may have saved my life..”

“You’re welcome”, the girl said and smiled, and offered him her hand. “My name is Alexandra – Alexandra Wentzler”.

“Jonathan Crane”, he answered with a light smile, shaking her hand. 

`Alexandra – what a beautiful name that is!´ Jonathan thought, still holding her hand. 

Had all this really happened? Had this girl he had never seen before really helped him, really defended him? This moment was something completely new to Jonathan, but he didn’t feel bad - quite the opposite.

Who was she? Where had she come from? Alexandra told Jonathan that she had recently moved here from Germany and today was her first day at Gotham High School.

“I was looking for the math classroom but I think I got lost.”, Alexandra said, looking at Jonathan inquiringly. 

His face brightened up.

“Hey, you are in my class then!”, he said and he noticed a tone of joy in his voice. 

Alexandra smiled lightly. Jonathan hated Gary and Matt for what they had done to him today, but although he knew that today he had possibly been in real danger, at the same time he was grateful for today’s incident, because it had brought Alexandra into his life – and this was by far the best thing that had happened to him in a long time.  

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[scotsrockgod]

I hope to have time to start reading this this weekend.