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Post by Pisces on Sept 4, 2011 9:34:47 GMT -5
You added to this??  WOOHOOOOO!!!! Please link me!!!! |
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Post by Cait on Sept 4, 2011 10:43:12 GMT -5
Link me too, Zombie, please!!  |
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Post by Pisces on Sept 4, 2011 20:03:42 GMT -5
OMFG I love how this is progressing!!!  This time, you have put so much emphasis on Judith's innermost thoughts about Dillinger, which I completely adore. To begin, your portrayal of Dillinger Jr as someone who sets himself apart from others, self-isolating and clearly unhappy, makes me even more intrigued about him, just as Judith is. He is like a treasure chest with a heavy lock on its clasp - something containing mystery. And makes you want more than ever to CRACK that lock! I have to admit, I laughed when he refused her offer to sit and eat in the cafeteria with a careless "No thanks," because it felt right to me. We don't yet know if he is so antisocial because he feels above all others... or far below all others. When he invites her to go to the bar, I was just as surprised as Judith! And this is where I began to feel a bit sorry for him - he seems so lonely. He's aware that he does this to himself and yet doesn't quite know how to rectify the situation - his invitation was clumsy and demanding, bratty even, and I think that only further served to frustrate him (as well as Judith). He struggles socially and I feel for him.  As Judith debated with herself whether or not to bring up the subject of Darek - I was on the edge of my seat, hoping she would! I loved how Dillinger nearly choked on his drink when she said, "How about some virtual reality?" Brilliant!!! LOL!!! ;D ;D ;D I feel that he owes Judith a BIG favor for correcting his hangover-induced error at his work - and I cannot wait to see what happens next!!! Even though there is no sex in this chapter, you are doing such a fabulous job of layering these characters. You have taken a minor character in a movie and grown him into someone I want to know more about - and yes, those vulnerabilites that are just below the surface make him infinitely sexier. THANK YOU for continuing this fic!!! I'm so excited to see what happens when Dillinger and Judith finally confront the existence of Darek!!! CB for you!!!!! |
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Post by Zombiekitten on Sept 5, 2011 18:06:09 GMT -5
Thank you so much again for such a detailed review !  I'm so glad that you say you feel sorry for him, and that it came through that he struggles socially. That's what I intented to write about. And I'm also glad that you enjoyed the parts where Judith thinks about the situation and tries to explain everything to herself. I first thought it might be too much of thinking and theories and stuff. And I'm really, really full of joy that you say I made you want to know more about Dillinger. That's a huge compliment and an incentive as well. I feel that he owes Judith a BIG favor for correcting his hangover-induced error at his work Hehehehe...  Keep your links everybody. Next chapter is already finished and I will upload it tomorrow. ;D ;D ;D |
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Post by Zombiekitten on Sept 6, 2011 13:54:46 GMT -5
**** UPDATE CHAPTER 3 !!!!! ****
"Warning": VERY hot !!! P.S. In case you're wondering: No, I didn't wrote this chapter in the last two days LOL. I wrote it months ago, and only had to "clean" it up a little before showing it Hope you like it... UNF...
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Post by bunnie24 on Sept 6, 2011 14:08:12 GMT -5
You HAVE to tell me about Derek---was he made specifically for her!?
TELL ME-TELL ME-TELL ME!!!
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Post by Zombiekitten on Sept 6, 2011 14:21:29 GMT -5
So you don't want to wait til it gets explained in the story ? LOL Well... just try to translate the word "Darek". (It's a word in some foreign language IN CASE that stupid Google translater didn't tell me wrong....  ) and you'll get half of the answer. But don't write it down here in this thread !  ;D |
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Post by bunnie24 on Sept 6, 2011 14:44:42 GMT -5
I can't find anything  *cries* |
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Post by Zombiekitten on Sept 6, 2011 15:00:21 GMT -5
I sent you a PM |
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Post by The Phantom Lady on Sept 6, 2011 16:59:44 GMT -5
Hmm according to Google translate Darek means something in 3 languages... I do think I get it though... I THINK lol. I LOVE little details like that btw!
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Post by anitnelav on Sept 6, 2011 18:12:40 GMT -5
I want to read it so bad! =)
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Post by bluestar on Sept 7, 2011 5:25:21 GMT -5
Thank you for the chapters Zombie !!!  This has progressed so well !! I loved seeing a different side to Dillinger- the vulnerability and that he is quite lonely which did make me feel bad for him. I can't wait to find out more about Darek's existence,that chapter was very hot !!! CB for you ;D |
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Post by Pisces on Sept 7, 2011 15:30:42 GMT -5
More already??? WOOHOOOOO!!!! Link me, baby!!!!
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moxica
Newly Infected
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Post by moxica on Sept 8, 2011 5:23:30 GMT -5
Chapter 2 is amazing! please send the newest chapter! god i hope they end up on the grid together!
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Post by Zombiekitten on Sept 8, 2011 6:14:24 GMT -5
Thanks Moxica !! I'm so glad you liked it! You sure will enjoy the third chapter too ... Link is on the way. Also to you, Pisces ! |
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WOOHOOOOO!!!!
) and you'll get half of the answer.
*cries*
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