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Post by bunnie24 on Sept 27, 2011 13:04:33 GMT -5
Ed: *chained to a wall*
Bunnie: *whips him* MISTRESS BUNNIE SAYS UPDATE...
Ed: She's already given me spankings--I don't like those!! *cries*
no seriously, update...otherwise I might have to do some serious S&M to him...
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Post by Zombiekitten on Sept 27, 2011 15:43:15 GMT -5
Well, Ed! Maybe you deserve this treatment for being mean to Judith !!   |
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Post by Zombiekitten on Sept 30, 2011 12:45:21 GMT -5
CHAPTER 6 !!!!!
(If you still got the links I just say: have fun with chp. 6. Everyone else can PM me for the link ;D)
Oh well... Now I'm REALLY curious about what you think of it .... ;D
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Post by The Phantom Lady on Sept 30, 2011 15:01:19 GMT -5
OH MY GOODNESS!
That was amazing, I love how detailed you were; I loved every little thing I learned about Ed, and how you painted everything in front of my eyes; it was very, very sensual!
I can see why you needed extra time for this extra special part! Perhaps Dillinger isn't perfect like Darek but perfect isn't always what you need!
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Post by bunnie24 on Sept 30, 2011 15:44:58 GMT -5
*lets Ed go* thanks for the update...I'll edit as soon as I read it!  |
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Post by ikklehen on Sept 30, 2011 19:49:38 GMT -5
That was my favourite chapter! Double squeeee! Well, the restaurant sounds exactly like the Hakkasan in London!  Seriously! It is of the Orient in nature. Also I have to commend your literature since it is not your first language! I love how you have wrapped up the contrasts of both romantic characters, Darek & Ed in this chapter too! I love the reference to the old Apple! ;D And the intimate scene is so gently portrayed and with such rich, emotional languish from Ed and how the femme takes it in! Gorgeous! Like an old black and white French film.
<3 <3 <3 A big fat hairy CB from me! ;D  ;D ;D |
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Post by bunnie24 on Sept 30, 2011 23:18:50 GMT -5
that was...amazing! that scene...the intimacy...seriously...OMG.
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Post by Zombiekitten on Oct 1, 2011 7:57:12 GMT -5
Thanks Victim of Love, Bunnie and Ikklehen !! *dances* So glad you liked that chapter !! YAY! I was really very excited about your opinion about it. ;D It's a very important chapter to me. Well, the restaurant sounds exactly like the Hakkasan in London! Really !!?? So funny ! LOL But actually the description of that restaurant has a special meaning... |
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Post by Pisces on Oct 1, 2011 13:44:39 GMT -5
WOOOOOOHOOOOOOO!!! I feel like I should be celebrating!!! Cue Etta James: " Aaaaat... laaaaast...!"  I don't want to spoil anything with my review and it's going to be SO difficult to do! LOL! Every single chapter in this fic is better than the one before. It's amazing to watch you grow as a writer and become more and more comfortable with your characters and the world they inhabit - I don't think I've ever had the pleasure of witnessing something like this before and I thank you for it! I can actually feel your confidence in the story and the characters expanding as each installment progresses! It was breathtaking to see Ed finally break through his own wall of isolation and ask Judith out on a date, though, like Judith herself, I was unsure what sort of dinner date he was offering!  Clearly, Ed left it ambiguous so that he would have an escape route should things not develop favorably, and that in itself speaks volumes about his insecurity. Poor man! I'm so glad Judith persisted with him! ;D I could REALLY picture this dinner date. Could see him using such topics of conversation to hold Judith at arm's length all while keeping her attention - and showing her that there are some things he has self-confidence about. And I adore your eye for detail with their surroundings and Ed himself - I felt as if I had dinner with them! I love this: There were tiny silver drops scattered all over his hair, a few on his glasses, one dripping down his temple, two other ones running along his jawline to his chin, finally dispersing within his stubble. I wanted to trace those drops with my finger. And the way you describe his scent... how very delicious!!! I was smiling SO big when Judith was taking a little tour of his home. Just like she was. His environs and belongings sound EXACTLY like I would have imagined. And YES- displaying the old Apple computer like an antique!!! And I liked how she saw the greeting card but didn't dare turn it around - she's hungering for as much information as possible about him, yet she's still respectful of his privacy and doesn't want to pry too much. She's really a decent girl! And THIS: The glass in his hand, sipping from time to time, Ed was leaning with his hip to the windowsill, a neon sign from across the street casting a pulsing ray of purple light across his chest, his black, shiny silk-shirt. Actually gave me shivers!! I LOVE the way you draw this parallel between Ed and Darek - SO well done!!! SQUEEEEEEE!!! And... ahhhhhhhhhhhh.... the BEST. ;D I won't spoil much here because people really need to read this part as you presented it, because it's so beautiful. Their lovemaking is so quiet, so tentative and unsure, yet powerful - there is a gorgeous thread of silent passion throughout. And it's so realistic. They're imperfect people reaching for one another, yearning toward that flashing glimpse of perfection that comes when the right people meld together. You've captured that SO well here. They are tender together, cautious, and yet nothing can possibly stop them. It's FABULOUS. Now... oddly... I am a little concerned for Darek. What will become of him now that Judith has captured Ed (at least for the moment)? I await the next chapter with extreme anticipation!!!!! CB FOR THE BEST CHAPTER YET!!!
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Post by Zombiekitten on Oct 2, 2011 8:47:39 GMT -5
Every single chapter in this fic is better than the one before. It's amazing to watch you grow as a writer and become more and more comfortable with your characters and the world they inhabit - I don't think I've ever had the pleasure of witnessing something like this before and I thank you for it! I can actually feel your confidence in the story and the characters expanding as each installment progresses OMG *speechless* Thank you SO much for saying this !!! This praise means so MUCH to me. Because first: It comes from such a talented writer like you who has created the most unique Red Eye fanfic in the whole web with a character description so deep and capturing and believable. And second: Because developing characters is something I 'm always trying to do very carefully and devoted. (it's not the first time I'm writing, just to let you know.... ) I always try to let them act plausibly and understandable. So I put much effort in describing them. SOOOOOOOOOO happy you appreciated this!! What becomes of Darek... hmmm.... Judith doesn't seem to need him anymore... Or does she...? ;D Well... All I can say is that I DO have ideas for the next chapter(s). But I don't know if I can top chp 6. I mean, regarding the sensual stuff... LOL |
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Post by The Phantom Lady on Oct 2, 2011 11:49:58 GMT -5
I watched this video on youtube today wanting to dance around my room but I didn't do much dancing tbh. I haven't seen the video in months and I know it's based on Tron now though. But I was thinking of Judith and Darek watching it...
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Post by Zombiekitten on Oct 3, 2011 8:01:36 GMT -5
LOL That's a cool vid !! Yeah, definitiv Tron-inspired!! I could even imagine these two main people are Ed and Judith, deleting Darek in the Grid Hahaha |
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Post by Pisces on Oct 3, 2011 18:59:23 GMT -5
OMG *speechless* Thank you SO much for saying this !!! :-*This praise means so MUCH to me. Because first: It comes from such a talented writer like you who has created the most unique Red Eye fanfic in the whole web with a character description so deep and capturing and believable. And second: Because developing characters is something I 'm always trying to do very carefully and devoted. (it's not the first time I'm writing, just to let you know.... ) I always try to let them act plausibly and understandable. So I put much effort in describing them. SOOOOOOOOOO happy you appreciated this!! I could tell you have written a lot before this fic, Zombie, but even still, you are improving so rapidly with this story that I had to call attention to it! Each chapter has been wonderful, but each has been better than the one before, and that's just so cool to get to watch! I believe your Ed and Judith - and that's something that's hard to come by in fan fiction!! Also, for me your fic has added something special and extra to the Tron Legacy - if there is a third movie and Ed is in it, I will be looking everywhere for Judith... it would now seem odd to see Ed without her nearby somehow. Victim, that is a COOL video - and it does remind of Zombie's fic!!! Good find!!! |
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Post by Zombiekitten on Oct 3, 2011 19:18:01 GMT -5
Also, for me your fic has added something special and extra to the Tron Legacy - if there is a third movie and Ed is in it, I will be looking everywhere for Judith... it would now seem odd to see Ed without her nearby somehow. How sweet of you to say this!! ;D OH Jesus when there IS really Ed in Tron 3 (for Tron3 is definitely confirmed !!! btw ) I think I will always compare that Ed to my Ed... LOL Only sad that my fic, especially a pairing with Dillinger, is quite unpopular and rather much just a "niche product". For even among the Tron fics Ed seems to be not so popular. And when there is a fic with him then he mostly gets paired with Sam Flynn. So fics with Ed are a niche product. Fics with a straight Ed even more... LOL |
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Post by bluestar on Oct 4, 2011 5:26:27 GMT -5
WOW Zombie!! This chapter was soo good considering that I loved the other chapters too,this was really great! Liked the comparisons between darek and Ed and he was so loving,also intrigued to see what will happen to Darek now! |
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Seriously! It is of the Orient in nature. Also I have to commend your literature since it is not your first language! I love how you have wrapped up the contrasts of both romantic characters, Darek & Ed in this chapter too! 
;D 
Clearly, Ed left it ambiguous so that he would have an escape route should things not develop favorably, and that in itself speaks volumes about his insecurity. Poor man! I'm so glad Judith persisted with him! ;D
