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Post by Zombiekitten on Oct 23, 2011 10:27:46 GMT -5
No probs Bunnie!  I feel the same way: I need energy and focus too before I read something.  There's no pressure to read this. Seriously!  |
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Post by Pisces on Oct 23, 2011 15:36:50 GMT -5
I've just reread this chapter and I'm really still gobsmacked by the turn of events in it!! This was an astonishingly creative way to deal with the conflict between Darek, Ed, and Judith. I LOVE the idea of Darek acquiring free will, and what he did with it was so very...human. ;D I liked Ed's tense manner before heading into the Grid - especially "agitated like a greyhound", because I'd recently been mentally comparing Leon to a Doberman Pinscher, lol! I squeed when I read that~~!!!!  I also liked the new sides Judith is revealing to him - it's so fascinating to watch Ed fall more and more deeply for her. This is probably my favorite moment thus far: The shiny black, lusciously shaped, sleek suit gave him the look of a dashing, slender, futuristic warrior. And his circuitry… it had the same color as his eyes… SQUEEEEEEEEEEEE!!!!! I hadn't realized how long I had wanted to "see" Ed in that suit, until he was IN IT. And I felt the bittersweetness of the moment as much as Judith did - that there was no time to savor such a moment. What a gorgeous sight he was!!! You've built wonderful suspense in this chapter, as Judith and Ed work their way toward the cause of all the destruction. I can see how much time you have put into this - it's perfectly paced and had me on the edge of my seat!! That stick holster on Darek's leg... was it inspired at all by Leon's gun holster..  ;D ;D ;D OMG. That entire last half of the chapter. I CAN'T review it without giving anything away, so all I can say is that it was terrifying at times, heartbreaking at others, and so wrought with emotion that it drips from the screen!! This is all about CONSEQUENCE, for everyone concerned. Ed is made to pay a penance for creating the lie that was Darek... Judith faces her own punishment for her confessions to Darek... and Darek himself discovers that having emotion and free will has a dark side, and that acting upon such dark emotion does not gain him what he desires. This is all brought together SO WELL, so dramatically, that I honestly thought it was the end!! Thank goodness it's not!!! ;D ;D ;D ;D The more I read of this fic, the more I know that I will always see Ed Dillinger as the one you created. I only wish that he would be the star of the next movie installment!! Because you have grown him so much with this fic that I want more!!! CB for this wonderful achievement, Zombie!!! Thank you for writing this and sharing it with us all, and I can't wait for the next chapter!!! I'm on pins and needles to see what comes next!!!!! |
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Post by bunnie24 on Oct 23, 2011 17:14:18 GMT -5
dude...that chapter...holy canole batman...
I'm SO lost, lol.
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Post by Zombiekitten on Oct 24, 2011 6:31:37 GMT -5
Thanks Pisces and Bunnie!!! @bunnie: So sorry that you are lost now. LOL That wasn't my intention at all! *blinks innocently* I liked Ed's tense manner before heading into the Grid - especially "agitated like a greyhound", because I'd recently been mentally comparing Leon to a Doberman Pinscher In fact I WAS inspired somehow by the Leon in your fic as I wrote this!! Because in the back of my head I had this description of you comparing his muscles to the one of a racehorse. That stick holster on Darek's leg... was it inspired at all by Leon's gun holster.. ;D ;D ;D OH YES it was ;D Darek himself discovers that having emotion and free will has a dark side, and that acting upon such dark emotion does not gain him what he desires. GOOD POINT !! And what you said about consequences is absolutely right too! It's always so wonderful to read your analysis of my story!! It's like reading an interpretation of a reader who totally gets everything I wanted to express and who even makes is own thoughts about it! Thank you so much for this!! I can't wait for the next chapter!!! I'm on pins and needles to see what comes next!!!!! Oh erm... actually this is supposed to be the final chapter.... I haven't wrote "The end" to it because I wanted to leave it open for me in case I have some ideas. But I confess that I haven't planned anything beyond this chapter! And, honestly, I can't think of anything that could top this finale LOL I have NO ideas yet.... Something else: While writing some parts of the story - everyone who read it knows which I mean - I had suddenly Rippner appearing in my mind's eye ... LOL Did anybody felt the same way? |
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Post by Pisces on Oct 24, 2011 16:58:10 GMT -5
GOOD POINT !! And what you said about consequences is absolutely right too! It's always so wonderful to read your analysis of my story!! It's like reading an interpretation of a reader who totally gets everything I wanted to express and who even makes is own thoughts about it! Thank you so much for this!! Oh erm... actually this is supposed to be the final chapter.... I haven't wrote "The end" to it because I wanted to leave it open for me in case I have some ideas. But I confess that I haven't planned anything beyond this chapter! And, honestly, I can't think of anything that could top this finale LOL I have NO ideas yet.... Something else: While writing some parts of the story - everyone who read it knows which I mean - I had suddenly Rippner appearing in my mind's eye ... LOL Did anybody felt the same way? I did, I did!! (waving my hand frantically!!) And yes, I know exactly which part you mean!! It was simultaneously sexy and scary, and definitely recalls certain... um... remembrances of Jackson. At least, it did for me. I suspected that this might be the ending, but I was clinging to the way you left them heading off for more adventure. ;D It's good that you left it open ended in case you think of more to add. Although you always could say that A Little Gift From Encom is complete and, if you think of more to write later, you might begin it as a separate sequel to this fic! I have to say that I really like the way you contructed this fic on the fly - I truly believe the best ones come together that way. Improvisation is often the purest fountain of creativity. You're very welcome for my previous comments - I did indeed pick up what you were laying down throughout this fic, and I've enjoyed the entire ride. You fleshed out Dillinger in a way I didn't think possible, from the brief cameo we've all seen. Hell, you made me feel as if I know the man!! That's the mark of a good fic. I could care less about typos or spacing, etc - that's for beta readers to worry about; that stuff's fixable. Good writing is much, much more than that, and your story had all right stuff - heart, passion, and truth. And damnit, I'm going to miss reading it.  Thank you for writing this fic!!! Thank you for giving us your Dillinger - I believe you have the right one. ;D ;D ;D |
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Post by The Phantom Lady on Oct 24, 2011 17:29:48 GMT -5
Oh I got the Jackson vibe too and I loved that!
It is a beautiful ending as sad as it is to say it, this fic is AMAZING and I wish it would go on forever and ever! I am in love with the characters, the world around them and the story!
Btw I was doing the fan fic award polls on the Michael Jackson site and I was really tired, but I was wondering why no one had nominated this story...
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Post by Crane on Oct 25, 2011 9:45:27 GMT -5
could I have a link too please?  |
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Post by Zombiekitten on Oct 25, 2011 14:58:47 GMT -5
Bloody Rose and Pisces.... Thanks for saying you'll miss them, cause I miss Judith and Ed already ... I can't stop thinking about what happens to them now that they are in the real world again, having to deal with real-world-problems. Having to digest what happened. Especially Judith... Maybe I add sort of a bonus chapter or somthing. Maybe even something erotic! Just for a little extra Don't know yet. The idea of a sequel is good, Pisces! If I have some ideas I will definitely think about that. You fleshed out Dillinger in a way I didn't think possible, from the brief cameo we've all seen. Hell, you made me feel as if I know the man!! *sigh* I feel like knowing him myself... He feels so real, so tangible and vivid in my heart... Maybe I managed to enrich my words with that emotion and that's why you felt like knowing him too. As for the inspiration-topic and creating that fic on the fly: Funny, but a lot of parts of the fic I was creating during work LOL I always have a little notepad in my pocket so I could, sneakingly, write down ideas. ;D *big sigh* I wish so hard for Tron 3 to happen and for Dillinger taking part in it... I would KILL for seeing him again! That cameo was just not enough and I YEARN for more. I think it's kind of an emotional gap I filled for myself with this fic. LOL THANKS LADYS FOR READING AND ENJOYING AND REVIEWING!!! You are an awesome audience. NOT end of line (LOL) |
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Post by Pisces on Oct 25, 2011 17:06:07 GMT -5
As for the inspiration-topic and creating that fic on the fly: Funny, but a lot of parts of the fic I was creating during work LOL I always have a little notepad in my pocket so I could, sneakingly, write down ideas. ;D Awww... I did that when I wrote CTL!! I wrote a lot of that fic in the car at red lights, on my lunch hour, etc... because I didn't want anything good to get away from me before I could jot it down. I still have the little black notebook I wrote it in! You made me feel so nostalgic about that time... damnit, we don't have a wistful emoticon for how I feel right now. LOL! I'm sure you miss writing Dillinger and Judith - I know I went into a weird withdrawal when CTL was completed. As you said, they become real people to you when you have spent so much time with them in your mind.  I truly do hope you write more for this, but of course, please don't try to force it! It only works when it comes naturally and it feels as if you can't hold it back, rather than something you are trying to pull out of yourself. Just know that you have many admirers who are eager for more and would be thrilled to read anything else you came up with!! ;D ;D ;D |
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Post by Crane on Oct 26, 2011 3:57:30 GMT -5
thanks again for the link zombie! i only had time to read the first chapter last night and well.. lets just say I will be making more time to read on! I found your writing style very easy to read and I very much enjoyed your descriptions I think men should read this so they know how women want to be treated! |
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Post by Zombiekitten on Oct 26, 2011 15:31:09 GMT -5
Thank you so much Crane!! So happy you like it and want to read more. (no pressure! ) I agree with what you said about men shoud read this LOL Isn't that every woman's dream? To have kind of a magic sex god who reads your mind and does the exactly the things you like...? I wrote a lot of that fic in the car at red lights, on my lunch hour, etc... because I didn't want anything good to get away from me before I could jot it down. I still have the little black notebook I wrote it in! You made me feel so nostalgic about that time... Squeee !! Yes! That's exactly the reason why I'm always keeping a notebook with me. 'Cause I have ideas in the strangest locations and at the strangest times. And I know exactly that I will forget these ideas if I don't write them down. LOL *sighs wistfully along with you* |
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Post by Crane on Oct 28, 2011 4:22:00 GMT -5
well I just read chapter 2 & 3. can I just say regarding chapter 3... naughty you Zombie!! (but i loved it!) |
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Post by Crane on Oct 28, 2011 13:10:32 GMT -5
i've finished it and i really enjoyed it. without spoiling it for others i'll just say i really liked how it wasn't just about the x-rated stuff. and your ending is fine as it is but also leaves room for more if you want it to. thanks for writing it Zombie |
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Post by Zombiekitten on Oct 28, 2011 15:24:01 GMT -5
Thank YOU for reading and commenting it, Crane !! Yeah, I really wanted to pack several aspects in that fic. The naughty stuff as well as the emotional and dramatic stuff. ;D I'm so happy you liked that mix. |
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Post by bunnie24 on Oct 28, 2011 22:05:42 GMT -5
I still haven't had enough time to finish the chapter...IT CAN'T END!!!  *pouts* |
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I also liked the new sides Judith is revealing to him - it's so fascinating to watch Ed fall more and more deeply for her. 
;D ;D ;D
I truly do hope you write more for this, but of course, please don't try to force it! It only works when it comes naturally and it feels as if you can't hold it back, rather than something you are trying to pull out of yourself. Just know that you have many admirers who are eager for more and would be thrilled to read anything else you came up with!! ;D ;D ;D